my short story

im going to post my short story and when i do read it an d give my critisim i need that if i want to be a writter. actually i cant decide on being a writter or a veternarian but i dont need credentials to publish a book but i do to be a vet. so that is what i want to do . if i write a book now and get it published i can put that money into my own veterary clinic where no animals will be youthinized . basically it will be for homeless animals. thats my plan. but any way seriously read my story and give me crtisism.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!